Angel of Death

Hey Kaylyn! This wasn't a bad start. I like how your MC seems like a normal girl and not some over the top character like some people tend to do. ...

Hello there! This was written very well. Your style of writing is exceptional. When you're telling a story you have to make sure that the first sentence hooks the reader, ...

Hey choc, here as promised! I liked the subject of this story. It was great how you made the reader wait till the end to figure out what was happening ...

Hello! Well since this was a only a prologue I won't be too harsh. This needs more descriptions. When this is the first thing a person reads, you want it ...

Hey Ash, I loved this chapter! Everything is just getting better and better! Your descriptions and the way Sophia is portrayed is just magnificent. The flashback was my favorite part ...

*Gold Star* I am like so in love with you right now. This was so great that I can't even.... You executed every scene, every emotion perfectly and my... This ...

Hello again Ash, Well I am enjoying this story but I must admit it does seem a little like Twilight, school-day wise. If you give it a little bit of ...

Whoa!! Hey Ash, Well, I must say, before I start, that I wish that I could have your luck. I mean I have Writer's Block constantly and when I do ...

Yay!! Hey Jig!! This was an exceptional last piece and I loved it. You captured everything about the stream of conciousness thing and you kept going with one feeling. Darkness; ...

Hey Jig!! Before I go on, I must say that no matter how great your writing is, I will not stop being mad at you until you give me an ...

Hey Ky, thanks for letting me know you posted this! Well anyways, I can't see anything wrong. Your writing keeps getting better in each chapter. Here you cut down on ...

Its been a while but I'm back^-^ Well anyways, this was absolutely lovely. The descriptions made me feel like I was there with Yamini as Amish and Lokesh stole that ...

Hey Jared!! This was weird but it was good. The only problem I had was the repitition of E-mails between Percy and that other guy. I'm a little confused but ...

I hate cliffhangers!! Well anyways, another great chapter. Darn, keep this up and I won't be able to critique at all!! All I have to say is that I love ...

Parting is such sweet sorrow but saying hello again for the first time in the long time is like...I don't know. Great!!! Sorry I've been gone for a while, really ...